Quelques corrections
we did a party => we danced ....
i played with my present : a new console ... => I beat my brother in my new video game ( pas besoin de rentré dans des détails inutiles)
Then , i went to bed, oublie pas de garder le temps au passé.

pour ton aide

par contre pour le deuxième paragraphe comment tu veut que j'expose ton idée,la journée qui se passe bien (pendant la fête) tout se passe bien mais par contre le lendemain je me léve est la je suis énervé enfin voila c'est assez byzarre

T'es pas obligé de te réveiller enervé...

Nan j pense que j vais faire un truc qui a rien a voir.

I woke up at 10:00 am but I forgot to give a book at the library. I noticed that I lost it so I had to repaid another. In the afternoon I ate beans and fish, I don't like it.At 14:00 pm I had to do a football match but it rained so it was canceled. I was very anger. I came back at home but before five persons stole my money.at 5:00 pm i took a shower ans i brushed my teeth.at 7:00 pm,I wasn't angry after I went to bed.

si quelqu'un peut corriger ça serait sympa.Je sais que mon texte est pourri mais bon .....

fais un truc moins banal , genre ta première journée de cours

I woke up at 10:00 am but I forgot to give a book at the library. I noticed that I lost it so I had to repay another. In the afternoon I ate beans and fish, I don't like it. At 2:00 pm I had to do a football match but it rained so it was cancelled. I was very angry. I came back home but before I arrived five persons had stolen my money. At 5:00 pm i took a shower and i brushed my teeth.at 7:00 pm,I wasn't angry after I came to bed.