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1) On 22 July 2012, I went with my grandparents in Tunisia. I go every year in the same hotel (the Hotel Mahdia Palace) since I was a kid. We were at the airport at 11 am and we boarded at 13:30. I was sitting on the seat C432, side window. What luck, I love to watch the scenery! Moreover, I've always loved traveling by plane ... except one. After 1 hour of flight, there was a huge storm! All the lights suddenly went off, the passenger were panicking, they cried! The plane was shaking and the oxygen masks have fallen. Finally, we went down to Rome airport to wait out the storm. We left the next morning at 8 am. I wouldn’t like to go through that again ! Fortunately, the airline has offered free return ticket. I doesn’t know if we will go in holidays next year, my grandparents were very upset and they get old. We are really lucky to be safe and sound!

2) Last year, I won the lottery 6million £ ! However, I don’t play often, I only play once a year for Christmas! One day evening, I was listening to the National Lottery on radio. When the six numbers matched my numbers, I jumped up and called all my family. My parents were very happy and shocked. My mom cried a lot! The next day, I found out that I had won 6 million £. At first I didn’t know what to do with all that money... I was helped by a financial adviser, he advised me to invest 6 million. I also gave $ 1 million to my parents and I gave away to an association against cancer ! My grandmother had lung cancer because she smoked a lot, she was really touched. What a lucky life!

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On 22 July 2012, I went with my grandparents in Tunisia
On the 22nd of July 2012, I and my grandparents went to Tunisia. Ou garde ta structure mais GO TO, pas GO IN

I go every year in the same hotel (the Hotel Mahdia Palace) since I was a kid.
Since I was a kid, I've been going every year to the same hotel.
(since -> have-en ou have been vb-ing)

We were at the airport at 11 am and we boarded at 13:30.

I was sitting on the seat C432, side window.
I sat in the C432 seat, which was a window seat.

What luck, I love to watch the scenery!
What luck did I have! I must admit that I love watching the landscapes from above the clouds.

Moreover, I've always loved traveling by plane ... except one.
except ONCE, when I had a very bad experience.

After 1 hour of flight, there was a huge storm! All the lights suddenly went off, the passenger were panicking, they cried!
the passengerS panicked (concordance des temps)

The plane was shaking and the oxygen masks have fallen.
There were turbulences and the oxygen masks were released from their compartments.

Finally, we went down to Rome airport to wait out the storm.
The captain then decided to land at the Rome Airport to wait for the storm to get over.

We left the next morning at 8 am. I wouldn’t like to go through that again ! Fortunately, the airline has offered free return ticket.
the airline offered free return ticketS

I doesn’t know if we will go in holidays next year, my grandparents were very upset and they get old.
I DON'T know WHETHER we'll go ON holiday next year, as my grandparents got very upset. Needless to say that they are aging too...

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J'ai essayé de ne pas modifier le vocabulaire et les tournures de phrases de manière à ce que ce soit proche de ton texte original. Je suis un peu à la bourre donc j'ai pu manquer qqch ou faire une maladresse mais ça sera déjà mieux ;)

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