Bonjour

Pour demain j'ai répondu à question sur un article de journal en expliquant ce que le journaliste veux dire par "la fiction du rêve américain". Aussi vu que je suis aussi bon en orthographe française qu'on orthographe étrangère j'aurais aimé que l'un d'entre vous me les corrige et me les explique svp.

When the journalist say “American dream” he want to say that sentence is not true always. Indeed when peoples think at the USA they think at a rich country where nobody is poor and anyone can succeed, but it’s false because the article explain lot of Americans are skimming along the margins, they are unemployed, they lack money and they contain to sale their properties for win enough money at the end of the month.

Merci d'avance.

He wantS à la première ligne

People sans le S

To earn et non for win à la dernière ligne.

Je t'ai juste corrigé les fautes de bases je suis pas une tête en anglais

" he want to say " -> synonyme "he means" est peut être plus propre.
not true always -> not always true, tu as inversé.
think at the USA they think at a rich country -> remplace at par about, c'est associé automatiquement au verbe to think.
the article explain lot of Americans -> explainS car the article est de la 3ème personne du singulier. Peut être qu'on peut ellipser le "that" après explain mais on dit souvent "explain that" pour "explique que" (that = que ici).
they are unemployed, they lack money and they contain to sale their properties for win enough money at the end of the month. -> le sujet est lot of Americans donc tu peux enlever la répétition de "they" et juste laisser les virgules.
for win enough money -> to earn money car to win a un sens de hasard, de jeu, de compétition. To earn = gagner au sens mériter.

ok merci pour votre aide, voilà le texte corrigé

When the journalist say “American dream” he mean that sentence is not always true. Indeed when peoples think about the USA they think about a rich country where nobody is poor and anyone can succeed, but it’s false because the article explains lot of Americans are skimming along the margins, are unemployed, lack money and contain to sale their properties to earn enough money at the end of the month.

Toujours un petit souci pour he mean -> he means, avec le s à la fin car he c'est de la 3ème personne du singulier. Le reste me paraît plutôt ok, il doit sûrement rester des erreurs de formulation mais tu verras avec la correction du prof

bon ok merci

Bonjour j'ai encore du rédiger un texte de 100 mots où je devais raconter la suite d'une histoire, pouvez vous me corriger svp ?

We continued to speak about Gatsby when sudden a forty years old man came his name was Shulse. He had a strong German accent and clamed to know Gatsby. The first name ok Gastby was Bäumer. He was born in Munich in Germany in 1880 and they met when they are kids and they became friend. They were two of use son of workers. Gatsby had always wanted to become rich because his parents were never earned a lot of moneys and he heard about the American dream. Gatsby left Germany in 1910 for to live in America and Shulse loos the contact with him. In 1914 he was mobilised in German army and participate at the world war one. After the war Shulse came to America for fin Bäumer. He fin him at New York, he get American nationality and changed his name for Gatsby. Also he partied at the World War one during the year 1918. After the war Gatsby became rich trading and shared is fortune with Bäumer his oldest friend. At the end of his story Gatsby appeared at the background of the room.

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