Bonsoir à tous , j'ai un devoir en anglais , en fait je l'ai fait le devoir mais je ne le trouve pas assez complet et pas très constructif au niveau des phrases/vocabulaires et de l'expression écrite , vous m'en direz des nouvelles

En fait je fais un exposé sur la ville d'Istanbul

Il y a différentes parties :

Tout d'abord une description générale avec intro , des trucs géographiques ...

Dans un deuxième temps , je dois dire ce que j'aime et ce que je n'aime pas.

Puis dire mes activités favorites , une petite anecdote et une conclusion , donc voilà ce que j'ai écrit

ISTANBUL :

Istanbul is the largest city of Turkey.
Ts population is twelve millions and this city is not quiet.
Istanbul is on of the beautiful city of the world and this is a very famous city with blue mosque and others historical places.
This is on of the largest and oldest city of the world. In Istanbul , you can see a lot of tourists who came from others country because this is a major tourists destination in the world. This city has a lot of historical and touristic places because it was capital of the ottoman empire.
That's why ottoman empire has build many mosques and monuments.
You can make a lot of activities in this city.
There are a lot of parks and sports area.
Istanbul is between Europe and Asia continent and of course city takes places side of the black sea. That's why you can see many fishermans in coast of Istanbul.
In Istanbul , I like to visit museums and historical places.
This city has a lot of grand shopping centers that's why I like.
City has one of the oldest book markets in the world.
On the other hand this city is very attractive.
This city if on of the largest abd oldest city of the world.
This city has oldest metro system of the world. You can see a lot of historical buildings by walking on the street. I like eating the fish in the city.

C'est pas très ordonné et je pense qu'on peut raccourcir .

Merci de m'avoir lu et de m'aider à corriger ou améliorer et mettre de l'ordre dans tout cas

Istanbul is Turkey's largest city and has over 12m inhabitants.
Not only is Istanbul a very dynamic and vibrant city but it is also one of the most beautiful cities in the world. A variety of monuments are in Istanbul, such as the Blue Mosque and other historical places (??? lesquels?), making it a very attractive place to visit.

Istanbul is also one of the largest and oldest cities in the world. This place is very cosmopolitan and lots of tourists, coming from all around the world, get to Istanbul to admire its architecture and other cultural specificities. After all, this is not surprising to see the cultural attractiveness of Istanbul when we know that this city was the Capital of the Ottoman Empire.

Pour le reste, les répétitions m'ont un peu découragé... à travailler
Pas de structure non plus... Au lieu d'aborder les sujets en ayant une structure A, B, C, D, E, F, etc
Ton texte est organisé en A, B, C, A, B, D, E, B, A, F, etc...
A revoir

non en anglais tu dis pas "Istanbul is Turkey's largest city " mais bien "Istanbul is the largest city of Turkey. "

Les deux se disent, histoire de style!

Les deux se disent et le premier rends vachement mieux

quand on dit "turkey's" ça veut dire : "de la Turquie" , donc les 2 se disent

et là " This city has a lot of grand shopping centers that's why I like. " ajoute un "It" à la fin