Voilà je suis au CNED en anglais et je dois rendre un devoir écrit.

Je l'ai fait mais je pense qu'il contient quand même des fautes...

Donc sans que vous vous souciez du sujet vous pouvez faire une relecture svp ?

C'est relativement court, merci d'avance à ceux qui m'aideront...

Hello Helen!

I’ve received your letter and I’m going to answer your favor!
In France, we have a lot of habits.

For example with the wedding: firstly we can celebrate it either at the town hall, either at the church (or the mosque or the synagogue). So for people who practice a religion, the wedding unfolds in one of the place I’ve said. And for the non-religions persons, the wedding takes places at the town hall. Usually, the bride is wearing with a large white dress!

In France, the Mother’s Day corresponds at the last Sunday of the month of May. The aim of this is day is to celebrate mothers. So usually children offer to their mother a present. It can be a book, a perfume, or even flowers.

Christmas is a very important feast for the French. We can considerate two dates: the 24th December evening, where parents offer presents for their children. And when children are fifteen or sixteen at least, they can themselves buy presents fort their parents. And the 25th December, all the family gets together and eats. There is a real feast, and we can be ten persons, twenty, or even more…

Usually, children discuss with their cousins, and parents discuss with adults.

One week later, there is the New Year’s Eve. As all countries in the world, the French celebrate the transition to the New Year!

For the 31th evening, exceptionally children stay up with their parents. And when midnight comes, each wish other a happy New Year, it is the tradition!

Merci à vous.

Allez please y a bien quelqu'un de bon en anglais pour m'aider !

" For the 31st* evening "

" the bride is wears a large ... "

" the 25th of December "

" we can be ten people* "

" each wishes other "

" non-religions people "

Sinon , le reste va plutôt au niveau nuance mais je suis pas très sûr pour ça .
Voilà les corrections que j'ai pu faire.

"where parents offer presents for their children"

"Where Parents offer presents TO their children"

"I’ve received your letter and I’m going to answer your favor!"

"I received your letter"
Ensuite "I'm going to answer your favor" est pas vraiment quelque chose que l'on dit, d'ailleurs même en le traduisant en français ça veut pas dire grand chose (Je vais répondre à ta faveur). "I'm going to answer your request" serait juste mais je te conseillerais d'essayer de formuler ça d'une autre façon.

"For example with the wedding: firstly we can celebrate it either at the town hall, either at the church (or the mosque or the synagogue)."

Tu écris firstly mais tu ne mets pas de "secondly" (ou équivalent) plus tard donc je pense que c'est mieux de le retirer. Ensuite quand t'utilises either, normalement tu écris "either... or" donc dans ton cas ça serait "either at the town hall or at the church".

Et d'ailleurs je trouve que "For example with the wedding" sonne un peu bizarre. Tu pourrais changer ça par quelque chose du genre "As an example, when two people marry, their wedding can be celebrated either at the ... or at..."

(HS: d'ailleurs saviez vous que either peut se dire soit "aïe-zer" ou "i-zer", et que les deux sont justes ?)

"So for people who practice a religion, the wedding unfolds in one of the place I’ve said. And for the non-religions persons, the wedding takes places at the town hall"

"Non-religious people", comme dit par Deadman93

"Usually, the bride is wearing with a large white dress!"

"the bride wears a large white dress"

"In France, the Mother’s Day corresponds at the last Sunday of the month of May. The aim of this is day is to celebrate mothers. So usually children offer to their mother a present. It can be a book, a perfume, or even flowers."

Pas besoin de mettre "the" devant Mother's Day.
"corresponds TO the last sunday of May"
Pas besoin de "to" devant their mothers et pas besoin de "a" devant "perfume".

"Christmas is a very important feast for the French."

feast en anglais veut plutôt dire un banquet ou un truc du genre, utilise plutôt "holiday".

"We can considerate two dates: the 24th December evening, where parents offer presents for their children. And when children are fifteen or sixteen at least, they can themselves buy presents fort their parents. And the 25th December, all the family gets together and eats. There is a real feast, and we can be ten persons, twenty, or even more… "

Je te conseillerais de reformuler ça du genre "We celebrate it on two dates: the evening of the 24th of december, and the 25th." Et ensuite tu continues "On christmas eve, we offer gifts blablabla"
Ha et enlève les "and" au début des phrases, que ce soit en français ou en anglais on commence pas une phrase par "et" .
Sinon "Where Parents offer presents TO their children" comme le dit Szarzewski.

"One week later, there is the New Year’s Eve. As all countries in the world, the French celebrate the transition to the New Year!"

Pas besoin de "the" devant New "year's eve".
Ensuite ta deuxième phrase est un peu bizarre, pour le coup je dirais "Like everyone else on earth, the French celebrate" (dans ta phrase d'origine tu dit "comme tout les pays au monde, les français..." hors "les français" n'est pas un pays donc ta comparaison n'est pas juste).

"For the 31th evening, exceptionally children stay up with their parents. And when midnight comes, each wish other a happy New Year, it is the tradition! "

"the 31st's evening" ou "the evening of the 31st"
"each wishES ANother a happy new year: it is the tradition!"

Sinon c'est pas mal, bon c'est pas parfait, mais c'est pas mal.

Un grand merci à vous les mecs c'est super sympa je vais le retravailler un peu donc en changeant les fautes.

Merci à vous bon je dois avouer que j'ai pas mal utilisé le dico mais bon sinon après la syntaxe c'est assez chaud de faire le truc parfait donc voilà...

Merci encore.