Voilà, je dois raconter mes dernières vacances (celles de la Toussaint quoi) en anglais, et je suis pas très douée avec les temps... :

During my last holiday, I went to Paris.
The first day, it was raining all day, so we stayed in the hotel: we played video games and we watched TV.
The second day, the weather was very good! My sister and my friend woke up at seven o’ clock, they did the breakfast for the family and I.
In the evening, we went to a rock concert and we returned in the hotel at midnight. Then, we went to sleep.
When we woke up, it was two in the afternoon, so we decided to make nothing of the day.
Three days before our return at home, my sister and me went to take the subway (it was warm and it was a lot of people) to go to visit the museum of the Louvre.
In the evening, we went to see the Eiffel Tower. We had dined in the Eiffel Tower. After, we walked in Paris.
Finally the last day of our travel, we packed our suitcases early in the morning. The we took the plane to return at home.

Voilà, si vous pouviez m'aider avec les temps, ou même s'il y a des fautes, ça serait sympa...

there were a lot of people, we had diner

chaud le séjour à paris qui a l'air trop chiant , fallait venir chez moi, on aurait passé nos journées entre le bois de Boulogne et strasbourg saint denis, ça sert à ça les vac', à se débaucher.

During my last holidays, I went to Paris.

The first day, it was raining all day long, so we stayed at hotel : we played video games and watched TV.

The second day, the weather was very good ! My sister and my friend woke up at seven o’clock in order to make the breakfast for the family and I.

In the evening, we assisted a rock concert. We went back at the hotel at midnight and we slept.

When we woke up, it was two in the afternoon, so we decided to do nothing.

Three days before our return at home, my sister and I took the subway (it was warm and there were a lot of people) to visit the Louvre.

In the evening, we went to see the Eiffel Tower and had dinner at this place. After, we walked in Paris.

Finally, the last day of our travel, we packed our suitcases early in the morning. Then we took the plane to return home.

Ca devrait être plus juste comme ça... Evite les répétitions, y'en a beaucoup trop. Essaie de varier les expressions

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During my last holiday, I went to Paris.
The first day, it was raining all day long, so we stayed in the hotel : we played video games and we watched TV.
The second day, the weather was much better ! My sister and my friend woke up at seven o’clock, they did the breakfast for the family and I.
In the evening, we went to a rock concert and we returned in the hotel at midnight. Then, we went to sleep.
When we woke up, it was two in the afternoon, so we decided to spend the day doing nothing.
Three days before our return at home, my sister and I went to take the subway (it was warm and there were a lot of people) to go and visit the museum of the Louvre.
In the evening, we went to see the Eiffel Tower, in which we took our meal for diner. After, we wandered in Paris.
Finally the last day of our travel, we packed our suitcases early in the morning. The we took the plane to go back home.

Ah tiens toi aussi t'utilises wordreference C'est vrai qu'il y a pas mal de répétitions mais j'ai pas trouvé grand chose pour varier.

During my last holiday, I went to Paris.
The first day, it was raining all day long, so we stayed at the hotel : we played video games and watched TV.
The second day, the weather was much better ! My sister and my friend woke up at seven o’clock,in order to make the breakfast for the family and I.
In the evening, we assisted a rock concert. Then, we returned in the hotel at midnight and we went to sleep.
When we woke up, it was two in the afternoon, so we decided to spend the day doing nothing.
Three days before our return at home, my sister and I went to take the subway (it was warm and there were a lot of people) to go and visit Louvre Museum.
In the evening, we went to see the Eiffel Tower, in which we took our meal for diner. After, we wandered in Paris.
Finally, the last day of our travel, we packed our suitcases early in the morning. The we took the plane to go back home.

J'ai fait un mix entre ma version et celle de Tigrou

Merci beaucoup

Arf, c'est "my holidayS"

HeartOfTheYew Ouaip, c'est le seul site de traduction que j'utilise, vu qu'il m'a été conseillé par ma prof