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Voila,il y´a quelques minutes,je viens de finir un DM d´anglais.
En faites,il fallait faire un résumé en s´aidant de phrases et d´une image ==} Mais bon,pour la correction de mon DM,ça n´a pas trop d´importance.
Ce que je veux que vous me corrigiez,c´est les fautes d´orthographe,la grammaire,la conjugaison des verbes,la ponctuation,cohérence du texte...

The other night,while Lisa was doing her homework and listening music,her mum arrived in the Lisa´s room.She worried about her mum and decided to go out with her friends for took about Liza´s mum.She thinks her mum wants to be a pop star but Tom doesn´t believe it.He said his dad was singing an old Beatles song in the kitchen.Liza told her mum was a group and the singer of a group stan up a new group;the guitarist became a school teacher and the drummer went to prison.This history is a reason of her troubling.

Donc je vous serais reconnaisant si vous me corrigez mes fautes et me dire pourquoi vous avez corriger ces fautes.

d´avance.

listen to music et non listen music
La flemme pour les autres

"Liza told her mum was a group and the singer of a group stan up a new group;the guitarist became a school teacher and the drummer went to prison." Cette phrase là me semble un peu louche mais sinon le reste je crois que ça va, a par ce qu´a dit Wert_evil.

Sinon des fois tu mets Lisa, et des fois Liza

Merci pour vos réponses mais que me conseillez-vous de mettre à la phrase qui paraît louche ?

The other night,while Lisa was doing her homework and listening music,her mum arrived in the Lisa´s room.She worried about her mum and decided to go out with her friends for took about Liza´s mum.She thinks her mum wants to be a pop star but Tom doesn´t believe it.He said his dad was singing an old Beatles song in the kitchen.Liza told her mum was a group and the singer of a group stan up a new group;the guitarist became a school teacher and the drummer went to prison.This history is a reason of her troubling.

Listening to music

for took about: je suis pas tès sur de cette formulation, perso j´aurais plutot mis: to learn a bit more about liza´s mother.
En tout cas, on ne dit pas for took... mais to took...

She thinks her mum...: d´un coup tu passe au présent alors que le reste du texte est au passé.

Liza told her mum was...: en gros tu dis que que liza raconte à sa mère qu´elle était un groupe... Ca veut pas dire grand chose. A la place: Liza told to her mum that she was a member of a band (le mot group est un faux ami: groupe de musique = band).

went to prison: plutot was put in jail, c´est plus "anglais".

stan up a new group: c´est une expression du dico ca non? à la place create, tout simplement: create a new band

created pardon

ou plutot has created (present perfect)

Voila,je poste ce message car je voudrais remercier tous ceux qui m´ont aidé et en particulier,Brain-Damage.

beaucoup

PS : Oui,"stan up" est bien une expression de dico Brain-Damage^^.