Bonjour à tous ,
Voila j´ai une rédaction à faire en anglais :
il faut raconter sa pire et sa meilleur journée de ses vacances .
15 lignes par journée donc 30 lignes en tout .
Voilà ce que j´ai fais

The best day of my holidays : monday , October 29th :

I woke at 9:00 am then I had breakfast , I took a shower and I broshed my teeth after this I played video games till midday . In the afternoon I ate chicken with chips and in the dessert I ate a delicious ice . The weather like was good , I played basketball to the park with my friends . I was on the team of Douglas , Nicolas and cédric and our adversaries were Franck , Sébastien ,Alexandre and Paul . My team Won the match 52 to 39 , We were happy , it was a very good afternoon . At 8:00 pm we went to the Mc Donalld , it was good . I went at home at 9:30 pm I was tired . I brushed my teeth and I took a shower and I went to my bed at 10:00 pm .
It was a very nice day

The less good day of my holdays : Friday , November 2nd :

I woke up at 11:00 am , I wanted brushed my teeth but the tube of my toothpaste was empty then I took a shower but the watter was cold , I was angry .
In the afternoon , I ate spinash with fish , I didn´t tooke a dessert because there was not any more , my brother took the last yoghurt . The weather like was bad , it rained this day so my match of soccer was cancelled , I was furious . I stayed in my bedroom , I played video games all the afternoon and I lost all my parties . In the evening , I had dinner , I ate green beans and a steak after this I went to my bed . It was 9:00 pm .

It was a very bad day

Voilà ce serait sympas si vous pouvez me dire ce qui ne vas pas , si il y a des fautes ou même rajouter des choses pour perfectioner mon devoir .

à vous de bien vouloir m´aider

alors attends 5 minutes je vais te corriger ca

ok

I woke at 9:00 am. Then, I had breakfast , I took a shower and I brushed my teeth. After this, I played video games until midday. In the afternoon I ate a chicken with chips and a delicious ice. The weather was good , I played basketball in the park with my friends . I was with Douglas , Nicolas and cédric and we were against Franck , Sébastien ,Alexandre and Paul . My team won the match 52 to 39. We were happy, it was a very good afternoon . At 8:00 pm we went to Mc Donald, it was good. I went back home at 9:30 pm, I was tired . I brushed my teeth and I took a shower. I went to my bed at 10:00 pm .
It was a very nice day

The WORSE (!!!!) day of my holydays was Friday , November 2nd :

I woke up at 11:00 am , I wanted to brush my teeth but the tube of my toothpaste was empty! Then, I took a shower but the water was very cold , I was angry.
In the afternoon, I ate spinash with fish , I didn´t take a dessert because there was not any more , my brother took the last yoghurt . The weather was bad , it rained this day. My match of soccer was cancelled , I was furious . I stayed in my bedroom , I played video games all the afternoon and I lost all my parties . In the evening , I had dinner , I ate green beans and a steak. After this I went to my bed . It was 9:00 pm .

It was a very bad day

Bon c´est une correction rapide mais tu peux toi meme améliorer ton texte en remplaçant tous les "good" par des synonymes, il y a trop de répétitions.
J´ai peut etre oublié quelques fautes, j´ai fait ca rapidement.

ok merci beaucoup

De rien