bonjour,

je dois encvoyer une lettre de motiv ds une agence d´immobilier à londres pr pouvoir esperer avoir un stage,
pouvez vous svp me corriger les fautes et m´aider à l´améliorer
merci

Work Recruitment in August 2007 10/2/07
Real Estate Agency XXXXX

Dear Sir/Madam,

I enclose my CV for your attention. As you will see, I ‘m studding property in French.
I’m very interested to do a stage in your real agency for many reasons.
In fact, I want improve my English and learn how you work because I would come to work in a real agency in the future years.
Besides, I can learn you, the French property technical, and you could compare them.
I think that if I can do the stage, I will sleep in a near house hotel.

You can contact me with my E-Mail or my Phone if you have questions.
In any event, I will telephone you newt week to arrange a telephonique meeting and to discuss you.

Yours faithfully

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Mister/Madam of ear, I join my cv to your attention. Because you will see, studding property of the `m of French I. I am very interested to make a stage at your true agency for much of reasons. In fact, I want improve my English and learn how you work because I would come to work in true years of an agency in the future. Moreover, I can learn to you, the technical French property, and you could compare them. I think that if I can make the stage, I will sleep in a hotel close to house. You can contact me with my E-mail or my telephone if you have questions. No matter what it arrives, I will telephone week of newt to you to organize a meeting of telephone and to discuss you. Sincerely yours

"for much of reasons"

Je ne pense pas.
Reasons n´est pas indénombrable et "Much of" je sais même pas si ca existe.
Many reasons etait mieux,voir several reasons.

Et sinon,"furthermore" fait plus anglais que "moreover" qui est a dominante américaine.

For many reasons... biensur !

On m´a souvent dit d´éviter de dire que c´est parce que je voulais mieux parler la langue, parce que l´employeur s´en fout carrément.

Et c´est vrai

Il faut uniquement mettre ce que tu peux apporter à l´entreprise , car les hotes d´étudiants étrangers savent bien qu´ils ne viennent pas pour gouter aux spécialités culinaires locale mais bel et bien pour parler anglais