Hi all.

Could someone help me into correcting my orthographic errors ?

Big tx

Would like to do a gap year ?

Gap year is really an interessant year. It´s the only year where we can give ourself. Hardly we´ll have finished our studies, we ´ll had to work. Then we can increase our human experience, and we can help the world to decrease the poverty. As we´ll close our eye on the needy, as we won´t construct them a future, riches countries would have to send their young studen in the NGOs ! Of course there are some excess, also gap year becomes a business and a way to have fun only. We musn´t be selfish. On top of that, gap year is a mean to take a bread and to develop our personnal hability. Currently the world need us, let´s us not sink into poverty.

merci d´avance ^^

"Would like to do a gap year ?"
Il manque pas un sujet là ?
1ère ligne : "interessant" -> "interesting"
"where" -> "when"
2ème ligne : "we ´ll had to work" -> "we ´ll have to work"
4ème ligne : "riches" -> "rich"
"studen" -> "students"
6ème ligne : "mean" -> "means"
Dernière ligne : "need" -> "needs"

C´est les fautes que j´ai vues. Mais j´en ai peut-être laissé passer.

beaucoup

The text deals with the Gap Year. We learn that a quarter of students is gone in Gap Year. But, it denouces these students were futile, and this experience was only for their own fun. The rich students Voluntary service abroad is supposed to help the communities. Yet Gap Year students may do more harm than good. Gap Year could be considered a modern equivalent of the Grand Tour. Now instead of robbing the european art, they have fun in parc. Grand Tour & Gap Year are both reserved for an elite of students who wants to take a break. Besides, they seek more and more fun as in the Grand Tourist, which is opposite at the sens of Gap Year. Also, they export their idea in the world, a little as they do with the art. On top of that they can increase their public relations : Gap Year is always more popular ! Gap Year schemes wich are run for a profit because they attract students who want to enjoy themselves rather then work for a community. So, the main criticism of Gap Year is that it´s becoming business whereas it´s an humanitarian action ! Fortunately some Websites exist to advise students "to critically examine schemes".

La suite. Merci de corriger mes fautes !

Je lèche les pieds de celui qui s´appitoie sur mon niveau un peu bas en anglais ^^

The text deals with the Gap Year. We learn that a quarter of the students is gone in Gap Year last year. Then, it denounces that these students were useless, and this experience was only for their own fun. The rich students Voluntary service abroad is supposed to help the communities. Yet Gap Year students may do more harm than good. Gap Year could be considered as a modern equivalent of the Grand Tour. Now instead of robbing and studding the european art, they have fun in parks. Grand Tour & Gap Year are both reserved for an elite of rich students who wants to take a break. Besides, they seek more and more fun like in the Grand Tour, which is in opposition with the main idea of the Gap Year : helping others. Also, they export their ideas in the world, a little as they did with the art at the Enlightnment. On top of that they can increase their public relations : Gap Year is still more popular ! Gap Year schemes are run for a profit because they attract students who want to enjoy themselves rather than work for a community. So, the main criticism of Gap Year is that it´s becoming a business whereas it´s an humanitarian action ! Fortunately some Websites exist to advise students "to critically examine schemes".

correction apportée.. si certains voient des photes ^^

J´en ai pas vu, mais attends confirmation d´autres...

Tu viens d´où Watza ?

J´ai tout corrigé et rendu ce matin(après 4h de philo yeaah).

Je suis Nantais, pourquoi ?

Essay : Whats kinds of films do you like ? Give your reasons and illustrate with examples.

Films permits us to dream, to live great events, to have another opinions about the whole word. This is an important issue when we´re in a standardized world : people are looking for some entertainment to have a break from the stress of everyday life. Thus, I think beyond the headlines, each films could arouse interest. I´m crazy about action films which enlist us in the life of a "chosen one", who is surrounded with a lot of mystery. For instance, Matrix describes us the end of humanity. But, a profecy says that human could be saved by Neo. Furthermore, the special effects are magnificent : we´re overwhelmed by slow motions into the fightings. I like too the comedies which satirize important things. Because we must stand back on these facts, it´s important to see these films which give us another look on the world such as in Thank You for Smoking. Nick Naylor is the lobber of the tobbaco entreprises. Also, it´s really fun to see this man defending the right of smoker. Whereas doctor and NGO are against the cigarette, this man has to defend the "defense-less" corporations. On the contrary, I hate the fans of an actor or an actress. In fact, I find that´s really stupid, because it could be dangerous, as it´s with Tom Cruise which is in a sect, or useless, since the actor are not lonely to make a film : indeed film director manage them ! Finally, my favourite films must contain philosophical elements : they must captivate me with their scenarios, the thrills they give me and also worlds they describe.

Si certains ont envi de corriger mon Essay... n´hésitez pas (: ^^

Pas d´âmes charitables ? :´(

Films permit us to dream, to live great events, to have another opinions about the whole word. This is an important issue when we are in a standardized world : people are looking for some entertainments to have a break with the stress of everyday life. Thus, I think beyond the headlines, each film could arouse interest. I´m crazy about action films which enlist us in the life of a "chosen one", who is surrounded with a lot of mystery. For instance, Matrix describes us the end of humanity. But, a prophecy says that human could be saved by Neo. Furthermore, the special effects are magnificent : we are overwhelmed by slow motions into the battles. I like too the comedies which satirize important things. Because we must stand back on these facts, it is important to see these films which give us another look on the world such as in Thank You for Smoking. Nick Naylor is the lobber of the tobacco entreprises. Also, it is really fun to see this man defending smokers rights. Whereas doctor and NGO are against the cigarette, this man has to defend the "defense-less" corporations. On the contrary, I hate the fans of an actor or an actress. In fact, I find that really stupid, because it could be dangerous, as it is with Tom Cruise which is in a sect, or useless, since the actor are not lonely to make a film : indeed a film director manages them ! Finally, my favourite films must contain philosophical elements : they must captivate me with their scenarios, the thrills they give me and also worlds they describe.

Voilà, j´ai fait ça en speed, j´y reviens sûrement cette après-midi. ^^

Bourreau

Dieu te bénisse

Films permit us to dream, to live great events, to have another opinions about the whole word. This is an important issue when we´re in a standardized world : people are looking for new ideas and some entertainments to have a break with the stress of everyday life and to have fun, yet they must critically choose them.

Thus, I think beyond the headlines, each film could arouse interest. I´m crazy about action films which enlist us in the life of a "chosen one", who is surrounded with a lot of mystery. For instance, Matrix describes us the end of humanity. But, a prophecy says that human could be saved by Neo... There are suspens. Furthermore, the special effects are magnificent : we are overwhelmed by slow motions into the battles.
I like too the comedies which satirize important things. Because we must stand back on these facts, it´s important to see these films which give us another look on the world such as in Thank You for Smoking. In this film, Nick Naylor is the lobber of the tobbaco entreprises. Also, it´s really fun to see this man defending smokers rights. Whereas doctor and NGOs are against the cigarette, this man has to defend the "defense-less" corporations.
On the contrary, I hate the fans of an actor or an actress. In fact, I find that´s really stupid, because it could be dangerous, as it´s with Tom Cruise which is in a sect, or useless, since the actor are not lonely to make a film : indeed a film director and his team manage them !

Finally, my favourite films must contain philosophical elements : they must captivate me with their scenarios, the thrills they give me and also worlds they describe.

J´ai refait en indentant et en faisant un plan :p

de la mort

as it´s with Tom Cruise which is in a sect,

Faut pas mettre "who" au lieu de "which" ?

salut; quelques petites remarques (mais je ne suis pas très fort en anglais...)

"have another opinions" > another avec un pluriel il y a quelque chose qui cloche je trouve.

"There are suspens" > perso j´aurais mis "there is"

"magnificent" > y a pas un S?

"I like too the comedies" > j´aurais mis "i like also comedies"

"tobbaco enterprises" > "toBaCCo industry" perso je parle plutôt d´industrie du tabac que d´entreprise du tabac

"defense-less" > "defenceless" (chopé dans un dico celui là)

"which" > idem Chaos_Clad

"not lonely to make" > je verrais plutôt "alone"

voilà mais comme je l´ai dis, j´suis pas super méga fort en anglais...

Another opinions other opinions
some entertainments some entertainment (je crois)
yet they must critically choose them pas compris ce que tu voulais dire mais critically je pense pas que ça existe
which enlist us in the life of a "chosen one" je sais pas si enlist peut avoir ce sens-là
There are suspens there is
I like too the comedies I also like comedies (ou "I like comedies too" mais avec le which c´est ptet moins correct)
lobber lobbyist ?
tobbaco entreprises je dirais aussi tobacco industry
it´s really fun funny (fun est un nom)
smokers rights smokers´ rights
defense-less defenceless
as it´s with Tom Cruise which is in a sect as with Tom Cruise who is in a sect (je pensais qu´on pouvait dire which mais apparemment non )
since the actor are not lonely to make a film since the actorS are not alone to make a film

Sinon pour la correction de terminat0r, pas de "s" à "magnificent", je crois que l´adjectif n´en prend jamais en anglais d´ailleurs ^^.

Valà .