Bonjour, je suis en 3° et je dois faire un portrait de moi même en anglais. Je n´est pas un excellent niveau et j´aimerais qu´on me corrige mes fautes svp :

My name is Marie B. I was born on 17th October 1992 in Paris. I´ve got 13 years.
Now, I live in Toulouse for 12 years. I move for the work of my parents.
I´ve one sister whose her name is Clémentine. She has got 17 years. About since (là je voulais dire depuis environ; je sait pas si ça se dit comme ça) I´ve got 11 years, I got along with his (et là: je m´entends bien avec elle).

I´m short and slim. I´ve got auburn long hair and they´re wavy. I´ve got the eyes brown of my father. My tooth are like my aunt.

I´m often pessimistic. My room is in disordely. One reproaches me all times I´m absent-minded.

I like sport and particuliarly soccer, but I´m doesn´t play it. I support TFC and the team of France, of course! I´m haven´t favourite player.
I´ve played volley for 3 years in the team of the colleague. I entraine one per week. But I wouldn´t to be a professional.

Pour dire l´âge,on utilise "I am [âge(chiffres seulement)]".

Ne calque pas les dates avec celles françaises.

"I have lived in Toulouse for 12 years".

Après whose,pas d´article!

About since I´ve got 11 years => Since about my 11 y-o.

Short?Tu voulais dire petite?Alors,c´est "small".

Être en désordre = to be disordonned.

"One reproaches me" => I am reproached.

I´m does not play...I do not play.

Même reparque pour "I´m haven´t".

Collège = middle school.

Une fois par semaine = once one week.

Pas de "to" après "would(not)".

move (l.2) : sûre que tu dois mettre un présent?

work of my parents (l.2) : quand le COD est humain, on met : "my parents´ work"

Depuis environ (l.3-4) = Since ("for" si c´est un temps donné) approximately

je m´entends bien avec elle (l.5) : I gets along well with her

auburn(l.6) = ?

brown (l.6) : se place devant le nom

My tooth are like my aunt (l.7) : il faut dire : "My teeth are those of my aunt"

disordely (l.8) : disorder

particuliarly (l.10) : particularly

but I´m doesn´t play it (l.10) : pas de "am"

I´m haven´t favourite player. (l.11) : idem

colleague (l.12) : college

I entraine one per week (l.12) : Once per week

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12 fautes

et l´age aussi, bien joué fox ;)

"Pas de "to" après "would(not)"." en fait, c´est would not like to...

(pour : je ne voudrais pas...)

My teeth look like my aunt ones. ;)

merci beaucoup à tout le monde! Lol plus de 12 fautes!

no problem

Quand tu dis : "my parents´ work" c´est pas "my parents´s work" ?

My name is Marie B. I was born on 17th October 1992 in Paris. I´m 13 years old.
I´ve lived in Toulouse for 12 years. I´ve moved beacause of my parents´ work ( si j´ai bien compris ce que tu veux dire).
I´ve one sister whose name is Clémentine. She is 17 years. I get along with her since I was 11 ( emme si ça me plait pas ).

I´m small and slim. I´ve got auburn, long, wavy hair . My eyes are brown like my father and I have my aunt´s teeth.

I´m often pessimistic. My room is a mess( ptet vulgaire). I´m always told that I´m absent-minded.

I like sport and particuliarly soccer, but I don´t play it. I support TFC and the french team, of course! I don´t have a favourite player.
I´ve played volley-ball for 3 years in middle school. I practice once a week. But I wouldn´t like? to be a professional.

J´ai corrigé tout ce que j´ai vu. Je pense que t´as oublié le like dans al dernière phrase.

Mar : à cause du pluriel,pas de s après ´.