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J´avais une petite rédac, donc le sujet était :
If you were given the choice, would you consider home schooling ?
Why or why not ?

Et voilà ce que j´ai fait :

The twenty-first century is knowing a new kind of education : virtual school. What is it ? The student who have chosen this system follow his education, staying in his home, with milk and cookies. It could seem very cool, very fun, but we forget always a big advantage of a normal High-School : we meet people, all different, and it teach to live in a community, to be able to have a normal social life. Here, we’ll try to explains all the pros and cons, to decide if this kind of education can be a good solution...

Firstly, we can think that it’s the paradise... Who had never dreamt to work in his bed, to learn each lesson with pudding in the mouth, with the possibility to speak or phone during the class ? Yes, virtual school, it’s the freedom. Sometimes, you’re in a real High-School, and during the class, you have to move or to run in the WC, but, unhappily, you can’t. But now, imagine.. You’re in your own room, and you must fastly drink something. No problems ! You go easily in the kitchen, and you drink. But there is an other positive aspect about virtual school. Theses last years, there has been a lot of violence or drugs problem, like, for exemple, in Columbine High School... But, if you study in your home, there is no problems ! Nobody will come and sell you some strange drug, or kill you ! You’re far, very far from all these stupid things. So, we can now say that virtual school is a very quiet education system, and not the less safe.

But on the other hand, living with all these problems, having to manage a hard schedule, isn’t it an igood way to learn the sense of the responsability, wich is one the principal aim of the education. If you “study” in your own home, you have no timetable, and no rigorous consign. How could you manage a serious job in the future, if you aren’t able to organise you school time-table, wich is, of course, lighter than an adult’s schedule. It’ll be impossible. It’s a real advantage of the normal High-School. But, an other goal of the school is to accustom you to the social life. If you have always lived in an enclosed room, how will you react when you’ll have to cummunicate with other people for your job, or to help somebody ? Stupidly. But, if you have gone in a normal High-School for some years, you’ll be acustomed to live with everybody, without any border of colour, nationality or hobbys... This is an other pros of the virtual school.

Now, let’s imagine I’ve to choose between study with “school.com”, or in a real High-School. Me, I won’t never hesitate, and would undoubtedly run in the High-School. To me, this establishment represents fellowship and friendship, and I wouldn’t be able to leave it... I think it’s a real luck to have the opportunity of meeting à lot of people in only one day. You speak with people, you eat with people, you study with people... It’s really good for everybody ! And we can also speak about the learning of foreigners languages ! To learn it, we need a real profesor who can correct our bad prononciation. It’s impossible to have this possibility with a virtual profesor. Seriously, I’ll choose the normal High-School for all these reasons...

Qu´en pensez-vous ?

d´avance !

Rien qu´un premier conseil : fais un copier/coller et mets ton texte sous word (vérifie bien qu´il y a la correction automatique de l´anglais activée).
Corrige tous les mots soulignés en vert et en rouge.

[D´ailleurs, pour les prochaines fois, cela devra être ton premier réflexe, avant même de poster sur ce forum !]

Il te restera des fautes, mais ça en fera déjà une bonne quinzaine d´éliminées...^^

Je l´ai fait sur Word !
Je crois que c´est parceque j´ai pas le correcteur anglais, je vais voir...

Et pos il faut enlever les fautes de frappes ! Mais l´idée, c´est bon ou pas ?

Hélas c´est bien ça :
Correcteur anglais non installé, et j´ai passé le CD d´installation... Ca m´apprendre à être gentil !

C´est pas mal du tout, mais il reste pas mal de fautes assez facilement éliminables : vérifie tes conjugaisons.

Merci !

Quand tu dis les erreurs de conjugaisons, c´est ce genre d´erreur :
"The student who have chosen "
Alors que c´est "The student who HAS chosen" non ?

Si c´est ça, pas de problème, je reverrai tout ça pendant la correction.

Je l´ai passé au correcteur pour toi.^^

The twenty-first century knows a new kind of education: virtual school. What is it? The students who have chosen this system follow his education, staying in his home, with milk and cookies. It could seem very cool, very fun, but we always forget a big advantage of a normal High-School: we meet people, all different, and it teaches to live in a community, to be able to have a normal social life. Here, we’ll try to explain all the pros and cons, to decide if this kind of education can be a good solution...

Firstly, we can think that it’s the paradise... Who had never dreamt to work in his bed, to learn each lesson with pudding in the mouth, with the possibility to speak or phone during the class? Yes, virtual school, it’s the freedom. Sometimes, you’re in a real High-School, and during the class, you have to move or to run in the WC, but, unhappily, you can’t. But now, imagine. You’re in your own room, and you must quickly drink something. No problem! You go easily in the kitchen, and you drink. But there is another positive aspect about virtual school. Theses last years, there have been a lot of violence or drugs problem, like, for example, in Columbine High School... But, if you study in your home, there is no problem! Nobody will come and sell you some strange drug, or kill you! You’re far, very far from all these stupid things. So, we can now say that virtual school is a very quiet education system, and not the less safe.

But on the other hand, living with all these problems, having to manage a hard schedule, isn’t it an good way to learn the sense of the responsibility, which is one the principal aim of the education. If you “study” in your own home, you have no timetable, and no rigorous consign. How could you manage a serious job in the future, if you aren’t able to organise you school time-table, which is, of course, lighter than an adult’s schedule? It’ll be impossible. It’s a real advantage of the normal High-School. But, another goal of the school is to accustom you to the social life. If you have always lived in an enclosed room, how will you react when you’ll have to communicate with other people for your job, or to help somebody? Stupidly. But, if you have gone in a normal High-School for some years, you’ll be accustomed to live with everybody, without any border of colour, nationality or hobbies... This is another pro of the virtual school.

Now, let’s imagine I’ve to choose between study with “school.com”, or in a real High-School. Me, I will never hesitate, and would undoubtedly run in the High-School. To me, this establishment represents fellowship and friendship, and I wouldn’t be able to leave it... I think that’s a real luck to have the opportunity of meeting a lot of people in only one day. You speak with people, you eat with people, you study with people... It’s really good for everybody! And we can also speak about the learning of foreign languages! To learn it, we need a real professor who can correct our bad pronunciation. It’s impossible to have this possibility with a virtual professor. Seriously, I’ll choose the normal High-School for all these reasons...

Arf c´ets très sympa ! ^^
C´est sur ton truc j´espère !

Oui, je viens de relire ça a l´air bon

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Il doit rester des fautes, mais ce sera plus des fautes de formulation (tu as construit tes phrases en te basant sur le français, et les anglais ne diraient pas tout à fait pareil).

Oui, il y a toujours bien sur, et surtout ce qu´il nous reste à travailler en anglais, du "mot à mot"... Je dois réussir à penser comme u nanglais !

Le truc, c´est que je me demande si j´ai bien répondu à la problematique, en évaitant le HS...

Allez, à la dernière (cf : la fonction recherche) j´avais eu 17... je vise un 15 là !